Hidden (A Six-Sentence Story)

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“Hurry, they are coming; we have to leave right now!”

The young girl quickly bent down and shoved a folded piece of paper through the slats of the heating vent in the room where she’d been staying.

Ten years later, as a demolition crew was tearing down the old farm house to make way for a new development, they made an amazing discovery… a yellowed piece of  folded paper fell at their feet as they pried an old heating vent cover from the wall with a crowbar.

“My name is Kara Willams and I am nine years old. My daddy took me from my mama and we are hiding and I am scared,” was written on the note in a child’s scrawl.

Mac, the demolition crew supervisor, had no idea who this little girl was or what had become of her after she left the farmhouse, but he knew that he had to find out.


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Author: Josie Two Shoes

I've been blogging off and on since August of 2006. I adopted the pen name Josie Two Shoes in 2007 as I began a new chapter of my life standing on my own two feet. Now I'm married to the man of my dreams; we live in dusty West Texas with a house full of furkids. I am an Aquarian by birth, and although I am past sixty and slightly frayed around the edges, my fascination with this thing called life continues. Faith, family, and friends are important to me; so are honesty, trust, tolerance, compassion and kindness. I'm pretty up front about most things, so if you want to know something more about me, just ask! :-) You can also reach me by email and find me at my Facebook page.

16 thoughts on “Hidden (A Six-Sentence Story)”

    1. Thank you, I am thinking about more of the tale, and what happened next. My typist has been sleeping on the job lately, I think she is finding new inspiration for blogging though, let us hope! It isn’t easy with no thumbs! 🙂

  1. nice lead in (to what I hope) is an upcoming series.

    (one of my favorite parts of this writing thing is how, when characters appear in a story (no matter how big or small/long or short), we, the writer can enjoy the sense of ‘story’ stretching out into the future from a past that didn’t exist all of a moment before.)

  2. I’m with Kristi. I totally was not prepared for that ending. Except it left us dangling! We must find out more! Does Mac solve the mystery???
    It’s what I love about this hop. I’m always amazed at how much can be packed into a mere 6 sentences. Keeps me motivated to continue writing:)
    Good 6!

    1. Thanks, Girlie! I always feel that my stories are so amateur and simple, and yet it seems that everyone found the possibilities interesting, so I just may need to share more of Kara’s story in the future! Six sentences is like a sample bite of a wonderful dessert, if it’s good it leaves you wanting more! Yes, please continue writing, you are good at it!!

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